Thoughts on Revision:
Keep the buttons, save
remove the lint
where story importance resides;
those phrases, sentences,
lines loved "too much"
special and likely not
weave through, locate
'ing' words, weak cheaters
they steal emotion's thunder,
deny readers access to subtext
or intricate details present
for close inspection like lace on a bodice;
ignore not those adverbs sprinkled
like fancy seasonings, a few perhaps nice
while abundance hides true flavor;
now review this "new" story, perhaps
recognize with delight the light
wakened from below the surface.
The story is ready for final edits.
by judy Beaston
March 6, 2016