Thoughts on Revision:
Keep the buttons, save
strong stitches,
remove the lint
caught
between phrases
where story importance resides;
catch darlings,
those phrases, sentences,
lines loved "too much"
considered clever,
special and likely not
an enhancement;
weave through, locate
'ing' words, weak cheaters
they steal emotion's thunder,
deny readers access to subtext
or intricate details present
for close inspection like lace on a
bodice;
ignore not those adverbs sprinkled
like fancy seasonings, a few perhaps
nice
while abundance hides true flavor;
now review this "new" story,
perhaps
recognize with delight the light
wakened from below the surface.
The story is ready for final edits.
by judy Beaston
March 6, 2016
